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Dark Reprieve (2008) IMDB rating: 6.00 Plot: Two people Matt and Kate wake up in a closed down prison. They have no idea how they got there, or why they are there. In the prison they encounter several terrors as they look for an exit. These terrors include a wolf beast that terrorizes Kate, a hideous monster that hunts them both, a “zombie” surgeon who operates on people whilst you’re still alive, the executioner who gives Kate a ride in his electric chair and finally executes her with the guillotine. But Kate just wakes up again in the prison and the nightmare continues. Also in the prison Matt and Kate encounter a strange number that pops up a regular basis, first the number is being printed over and over again on a printer gone crazy, next the number appears painted on a wall in blood. Kate finds a room containing a vacuum tube machine for sending messages between rooms, when she pushes the operation button it comes alive and a cylinder appears. Inside the cylinder are the pictures of five people, Kate has no idea who these five people are. Later in the movie Matt and Kate explore the basement in the search for an exit and discover five pairs of shoes all neatly arranged on a shelf. As Matt and Kate endure these horrors, the beautiful fashion model Raquel Lake is being interrogated by the police about a series of homicides. Raquel is arrogant and diabolical, she also has a very high IQ and proves more than a match for the professional police interrogator. Strangely many of the subjects in the police interview correlate with the events transpiring in the prison. For instance, Raquel is shown a series of pictures of five dead people, and when Raquel is informed by the detective that they are “looking for a cold blooded predator.” Raquel’s response is….”like the wolf?” What is the connection between the two people trapped in the prison and the interrogation of Raquel Lake?

Actors: Card Liam,Cronk John,Storer Shawn,Wisniewski Ian,Mystery,Sci-Fi,Thriller,

rate my poem please by Divena?
Lost To The Sea
born to the Island, a woman of past
sat spinning on her wheel
spinning the fleece of her sheep to last
while her man stood on the keel.
she cast her weary eye to sea
thro` the mist to sight his ship
will he e`re come home to me
for the sea was rough this trip.
there`s many a man has drowned
many a widow to grieve
as she spun her yarn and frowned
please God to beg reprieve.
the thick night mist turned colder
a tear ran down her cheek
her shawl wrapped round her shoulder,
it was cold.dark. and bleak.
she sadly walked towards the shore
the mist was slowly lifting
for she would see her man once more
his ship was homeward drifting
she knelt down on the land to pray
tonight they would be together
for she had thought him many a day
lost to the sea for ever

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I love this poem…(normally I see people put their poems here and there not good) but your poem is visual and metaphoric…very good job in conveying emtion and tying them to the physical elements involved.
I think you have a bright future (if you’re not already published) you should write a book of poetry and direct market in on a publish by demand website like Lulu.com

jim | Apr 05, 2007

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wow. very very good.
but is it really yours? i envy you!
show some more!
albastra | Apr 05, 2007

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If it’s out of a ten full mark
grado9495 | Apr 05, 2007

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You have put a lot thought and feeling into the poem, and the words flow very nicely together.

Very well done!
Georgie | Apr 05, 2007

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Nicely written!
spiderlady632003 | Apr 05, 2007

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It is very nice i really like it! let me tell you a secret i am jealous of your talent
Margaret T | Apr 05, 2007

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the poem is really nice. you have given a lot of feelings in this poem. if u continue writing i think it’ll be good enough to send it to a magazine………if you have any more poems could u please send them to me???
Ash | Apr 05, 2007

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10/10!!
lots of feeling inside, luv it!!!
BN | Apr 05, 2007

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Hmm. You’ve done a pretty good job of rhyming – the poem actually makes sense and is decent as far as plot goes, although there are a couple of loose ends you might want to tie up (Why is she spinning wool? What "Island" are you talking about? Did the man die or not?) and a bit of confusion for me as well (I thought the man was dead – did a double-take then realized my mistake.).

However, there are a few instances where you’ve sacrificed flow/word choice for rhyme. I now quote:

"sat spinning on her wheel/spinning the fleece of her sheep to last"

That’s kinda awkward ("to last" makes it sound you’re using "last" in the sense of "preserve" rather than the "the end"), though I can still see what you mean, i.e. she’s spinning the last of her sheep wool.

Then there are the parts where you suddenly switch the point of view.

"as she spun her yarn and frowned/please God to beg reprieve"

Not only that, but "frowned" doesn’t seem to be the best word for her facial expression at present (usually, people frown when they’re angry/annoyed).

And what really stood out for me was the last few stanzas.Too many "for’s" disrupt the fluid movement of the poem. Be careful of being too repetitive.

The potential is there; you’ve just got to polish the poem up a bit. Keep working at it!
tigertrot1986 | Apr 05, 2007

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You’ve wrongfully adopted an ancient voice. The story is loosely told and the ballad form does not quite fit the woman’s story…perhaps the man who was lost…but not the grieving widow.

I sense you’ve sacrificed a lot of meaning for rhyme…what does "a woman of past" mean? Why is her shoulder "cold, dark, and bleak"? E’re is not a word. You probably mean "e’er"?

Think harder. Write the poem that is underneath all this posturing. You don’t have to sound like Wordsworth to write poetry. Wordsworth is the only one who should sound like Wordsworth.
Nathan D | Apr 05, 2007